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Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph describes the information about the unemployment rate was faced in two different nations
such
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 as the USA and
Japan
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 from March 1993 to 1999. Looking from an overall perspective, the US redundancy was higher in the initial stage as compared to
Japan
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 but
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 was reversed at the end of the
period
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. According to the graph illustrates, during the initial duration, America had
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 higher rate of redundancy at around 7%,
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,
Japan
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 had only around 2.4%. From 1993 to 1995, there was a gradual decrease in the unemployment figure in America, from 7% to around 5.4%. One year later,
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 rate was increased slightly, which is around 5.5, between 1996 to 1999, there was a fluctuation and reached the deadline of the
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 to 4.1%. In terms of
Japan
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 had only 2.4 per cent in 1993, there was a gradual rise since the starting
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 to the end of the
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 and reached the end of the year at 5.3%.
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