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It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives. How could robots be used in the future? Will this development be a positive or a negative development?

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It is generally believed that
robots
 are going to replace human beings, for they play a vital role in their lives. In
future
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robots
 will get their permanent place in many fields;
this
 innovation may not have a good effect on our world. In the coming
years
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 machines will play an imperative role in every aspect and will make work easy.
To begin
 with,
robots
 will take over the control in banks ,schools,offices and hospitals.
For instance
, many tasks related to banks are sensitive and they must be done accurately which
robots
 will perform in an ideal way.
Furthermore
, in schools and ,colleges many administrative works will be carried out with the help of
robots
.
Similarly
, at
hospitals
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 it will be the right hand of doctors in many different ways.
Secondly
, scientists may send
robots
 to other planets like
,
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Mars for research purposes. These developments after the help of machines will bring more negative effects to our world as compared to positive. To commence with, most of the difficult tasks will be handed over to
robots
 ,and people will not try to overcome difficulties that they faced before these automatic gadgets.
As a result
, individuals will be turned into indolent and lazy creatures which ultimately will lead to unhealthy lifestyles inviting many diseases related to obesity,
such
 as diabetes, hypertension, heart diseases. After having discussed the pertinent points related to the subject, it can be inferred that
although
robots
 play a pivotal role in our life, they, if are handled in the wrong hands can destroy our planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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