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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Every country deals with the poor in different ways. We all know that in each country there
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 poor
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. and they are increasing in numbers. In my
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 are not helping themselves in
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 an aspect of dealing their everyday life for , the example they are just staying in their house and doing nothing, because of the laziness of
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 is one of the causes of debt.
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, some
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 in provinces they are thinking that if they can go to the big cities they can find jobs easily.
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, some are blessed to find a good job in the cities, but most of them are failed and because not enough
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 to survive they are just staying on the road and ask for
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 from
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 who are passing by them just to survive daily.
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, some rich
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 are not thinking of their futures, they are just like one-day billionaires. Spending lots of
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 in just one day. their mindset is we are rich we can buy whatever we want, and
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 they deal with a bad influence on their friends
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 they become addicted to drugs or alcohol and many more that can affect their
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. We can help the poor or lessen poverty by helping the charities that help the poor
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 or giving them a new job in the communities that they can make and earn
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 for their daily expenses. And give free education to the children to help them someday to find a good job and to change their mindset while they are still young that they are not forever poor. In conclusion, Not all poor will be poor forever, they just need help to cope with
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 poverty can defeat someday by helping each other.
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