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Some people think that the increase in international travel has a negative impact on the environment and should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The volume of international
travel
 is increasing with globalisation and cheaper
travel
.
As a result
, it is argued that the
environment
 is suffering and
that restrictions
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 should be imposed on
such
travel
. I think that international
travel
 does pose some risks for the
environment
, but the effects can be mitigated. There is no doubt that as the number of international travellers increases there is
increased
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 danger of the
environment
 being harmed.
This
 risk comes not only from the growing volume of flights
,
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 but
also
 from the
impact
 of huge numbers of
people
 visiting vital
eco systems
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, especially fragile areas around the world like Antarctica and the Great Barrier Reef. Another worrying development is the increase in cruise ships ferrying thousands of passengers around the world.
Therefore
, some are calling for international
travel
 to be restricted.
People
 have always travelled around the world and it would be very difficult to restrict international
travel
, especially for tourism and business as it is economically beneficial for local communities. If
people
 are concerned about the
impact
 of international
travel
, rather than trying to impose restrictions, taxes can be introduced to help protect local conservation areas.
Such
 projects can
also
 provide local jobs and help develop local communities.
Moreover
,
people
 nowadays are much more conscious of the
impact
 of international travelling and seek to offset the
impact
 by paying for the planting of trees
for example
.
People
 are
also
 travelling more by railway than in the past as railways become faster, more convenient and integrated, which reduces any threats to the
environment
. As we have seen, there are risks to the
environment
 from increased international
travel
, but
such
travel
 is important and any risks can be offset by different measures.
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