Some people believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to devolop childrens life skills than time spent reading

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. For real if a hand full people spend her active pastime. The
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skills the child becomes mentally and physically mature. In a mental skill a hand full people bored. Active spending
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Children can learn everything they need when they spend their time actively, all the time it has a big impact on their lives.
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, children grow physically and mentally, which means that they are mature and active in all aspects of
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inappropriate to leave children in active lives because they can oppose the state by misusing the Internet. Spending active time is not always right anyway
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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