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The most important element in a person’s life is their work. Without a satisfying career, life is meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Individuals from different walks of
life
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has
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 manifolds of conundrums when it comes to
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work
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 stability,
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, a crucial
factor
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 in human
life
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 is to have a
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decent
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descent
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job
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. Wherein,
life
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 is useless once the
work
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 we have is not satisfying; considering
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, I somehow do not concur with the idea, but almost entirely I coincide with the notion.
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 essay will focus on the weight of both views. Focusing on the least apparent side, I oppose
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discernment because there is
other
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factor
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 like health which is essential to
life
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. Inasmuch as, being healthy as
fiddle
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 is paramount for the people to sustain their wellbeing. On the account of recent surveys, individuals that
displays
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 a healthy mental and physical
status
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 has a
significant
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 to continue to live. As a corollary, health is considered wealth to some groups of society. On the basis thereof, I accede with the notion
due to
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the
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reason that
,
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career
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a career
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 is imperative to a person since it is one of the
source
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 of exceptional remuneration to sustain
the
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daily
life
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. In many ways, if the dominant member of a family is obtaining remarkable revenue, it helped in providing basic needs
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within
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with in
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 the family circle. A household with
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a member
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member
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members
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 having a stable
job
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,
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 is an exemplar
to
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this
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.
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, they are
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 and
worry free
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 due to the fact that they have all the means and support.
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, a
job
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 is a major
factor
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 that
differentiate
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 the
status
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 in
community
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the community
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.
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, once a person has a
well sustaining
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work
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 it signifies
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 level of socioeconomic
status
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. A remarkable physician working in one of the prestigious hospitals is a cicerone to
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,
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 while procuring a
shedfolds
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she folds
 of money they
also
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labeled
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 as a high person, henceforth, their
life
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 is full of meaning and
satisfcation
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satisfaction
. By and large,
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 essay has presented the reasons why I somewhat vary with the topic which is the other
factor
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 like health is essential to
life
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, why I almost entirely, I concede with the idea which is career is
imperative
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the imperative
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source
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 of remuneration to sustain
life
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, and
work
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 is a major
factor
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 when comes to
status
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 in our society. It can be foreseen that if an individual has a satisfying
job
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, it has a great impact on their
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life
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 and well being.
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