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People aim to keep a balance between their work and other parts of their lives, but few people achieve it. What are the problems of trying to achieve this goal and how can these problems be overcome?

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Today's generation
people
 are after money ,education and so on. Humans find it difficult to cope
time
 with their families,friends and to follow their passion. In order to achieve these ,goals there are various methods is discussed in
this
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Firstly
,due to ,
occuption
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occupation
 both genders have problems spending
time
.Having a certain plan like, a timetable for children should be planned among adults,so they can find the
the
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time
.
Although
 many tasks
is
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 given in
workplace
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the workplace
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 ,
time
 plays an important role in solving them. If they are complete it at
time
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a time
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 can relax and enjoy their weekend at home.
For instance
,
a
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employeer
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employer
employee
 have to
sumbit
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submit
 his or her
work
 to the boss on
time
 ,
were
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where
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 a moment of
work
 stress is lowered.
Also
, the head of the company should check after the staff and survey how is
their
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there
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 going
such
 as
,
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stressful
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stressed
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,tensed and so on.
Secondly
,
people
 are lazy to engage
with
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 activities. Their mindset
have
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 changed
becasue
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because
 of the
enchancement
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enhancement
 of technologies.
People
 are
no
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not
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concern
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 about their health can lead to diseases
such
obiesty
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obesity
,cardiovascular problems. After the incident
people
 mainly concentrated on overcoming
these situation
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this situation
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. "Prevention is better than cure" so enrolling in yoga , gym and health programmes helps to
socialies
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socialise
socialises
 with others.The
goverment
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government
 should restrict workers from their company after the duty
time
.
For instance
, in a survey
happen
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that happen
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 around the globe Indian
people
work
 more than they expect for a low income.
This
practise
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 should be avoided and should be fined. In conclusion,
people
 should find
time
 to
social
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 with their families friends as it
a
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matter of communication and
workplace
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the workplace
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 should not
encourgage
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encourage
 employees to
work
 more.
Hence
 these are some factors
can
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that can
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 give some
time
 for the
people
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