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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Many governments think that economic
progress
 is their most important goal.
However
, some people think that other types of
progress
 are equally important for a
country
.
Therefore
, I'm not only going to discuss both these views but
also
 give my own opinion. To make a
country
 develop, one can't deny the fact that the growth of
economy
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 plays
the
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 important role. In fact, many governments think that economic
progress
 is their most important goal mainly because it
boost
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 GTP which not only help to
a
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develop a
country
 but
also
 provide a better life for its citizens. The question is, is
economy
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progress
 is enough to make a
country
 develop ? Is it that easy ? It is indeed not. Other
type
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types
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 of
progress
 are equally important for a
country
.
Such
 as
,
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apply
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 better
education
 and social
walfare
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welfare
. Why is it important ? Well, let me explain it in
a
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 simplest way. If there is no
progress
 in
education
, it will do no good to a nation even if the economic
progress
 is at its peak.
For example
, if the citizens are uneducated, what is the point of opening multinational companies where jobs require high
education
. The
country
 will suffer poverty despite
of
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having those
bigs
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 companies. The same goes with social
walfare
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welfare
. If the
country
 has no
progress
 in social
walfare
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welfare
, it is more likely to develop. Take
north
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 Korea as an example.
Hence
in
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,in
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 my opinion, governments shouldn't just focus on
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the economy
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economy
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 system. It should
also
 focus on
education
 systems and other systems because they are as important as economic
progress
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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