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Details of politicians private lives should not be published in newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, there is much discussion with private
of
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politicians
, It is argued that the newspaper should not be announced the personality of detailed
politicians
' private life. I completely agree with
this
 topic because some information may be affecting their family , sometimes do not have good aspects want to be a
politician
. I will be discussed
this
 clearly in
this
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Therefore
, the
politicians
 have to be concerned with information of their family which is shared with the public.It is meant that maybe have a stranger that reached their family who gets danger because the
politician
 conflicts something with a competitor.
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, the children of
politicians
 had to disrupt via social media and were followed from the school because the reporter showed the picture which was shared online channel.
Moreover
, some people who have performance have a passion and would like to be
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 but do not want to be disturbed or share personal data with the population because it does not safe with their family.A good case in
this
 point is, Ae who is a professor at university and have a potential for developing Bangkok after he announced to race political
thus
 his family were searched by the people for checking history and his family.
Hence
 ,he cancelled because he was concerned about the privacy of his family. In conclusion, I really agree that the newspaper should not be shared the personality of
politicians
 with the public because it has a lot of problems with their family,maybe someone who has a good perspective does not want to be a
politician
 because they would like to be safe with their family.
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