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Details of politicians private lives should not be published in newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, there is much discussion with private
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, It is argued that the newspaper should not be announced the personality of detailed
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' private life. I completely agree with
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 topic because some information may be affecting their family , sometimes do not have good aspects want to be a
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. I will be discussed
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, the
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 have to be concerned with information of their family which is shared with the public.It is meant that maybe have a stranger that reached their family who gets danger because the
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 conflicts something with a competitor.
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, the children of
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 had to disrupt via social media and were followed from the school because the reporter showed the picture which was shared online channel.
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, some people who have performance have a passion and would like to be
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 but do not want to be disturbed or share personal data with the population because it does not safe with their family.A good case in
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 point is, Ae who is a professor at university and have a potential for developing Bangkok after he announced to race political
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 his family were searched by the people for checking history and his family.
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 ,he cancelled because he was concerned about the privacy of his family. In conclusion, I really agree that the newspaper should not be shared the personality of
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 with the public because it has a lot of problems with their family,maybe someone who has a good perspective does not want to be a
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 because they would like to be safe with their family.
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