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Nowadays university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education. Do you think that higher education is necessary to succeed in life? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.

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Currently,
university
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 qualified
people
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 are believed to be very successful in the
future
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, but many
people
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 make considerable achievements in their lives without
university
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 degrees. In my opinion, despite tertiary
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is
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 required for
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success in some disciplines, it is not an essential
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 of victory in life. On the one hand, there are some fields where
university
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education
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 is necessary for
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 development,
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 as medicine, law and engineering.
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, if a doctor does not specialize in any occupational speciality, his survival in is medicine is difficult.
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, he will end up
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living an ordinary life
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 of a successful medical professional.
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, it is evident from the example that the higher qualification ensures career growth in certain occupations and provides more job opportunities to pursue success in the career.
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, determining the achievements in the
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 does not
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 on tertiary qualification. To illustrate
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, consider the platform of business for employment where most of the workforce do not have
university
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degress
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degrees
. Regardless of
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, they achieve appreciable success in their practical lives. Many wealthy
people
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 invest in online marketplaces
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 as
Amazone
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Amazon
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 and
Ebay
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eBay
, where they progress effectively and earn millions of dollars.
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 of these
entrepreneures
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entrepreneurs
 are not overly qualified.
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 of
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, they get fruits of their learnt soft skills in the business market.
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,
successful
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future
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 is not solely reliant on
university
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education
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. In conclusion,
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 specialization from universities is beneficial for career development in some fields,
people
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 without higher
education
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 can
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 flourish in businesses by learning computer skills. I believe that it has been proven by the discussion and analysis of both sides of the argument that not only
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university educated
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people
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 but
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 less qualified
people
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 can succeed in life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foundation
  • critical thinking
  • innovators
  • vocational training
  • persistence
  • soft skills
  • adaptability
  • non-traditional pathways
  • lifelong learning
  • disparities
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