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Band 6.5

You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email •Give details of your purchase •Describe the problem •Explain why you need a replacement urgently

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I am not satisfied with the
skirt
 which you have sent me. I bought a leather black
skirt
 from your website on the 15th of August, but a white one was sent
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 me
instead
.
Furthermore
, the style of the leather
skirt
 is completely different from the picture, I assume that the picture which is uploaded to your website belongs to the original product. Unfortunately, you have sent me a fake product in the wrong colour. I would like to send back
this
skirt
 and purchase a black dress “Code: Diamond 201”. I would be grateful if you could send me the dress via DHL post
,
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 because I am planning to wear it to my sister’s birthday party which will be held next Friday. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Faithfully, Negar Sedigh
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Consider adding specific details about the size or order number to further strengthen your claim.
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Try to elaborate slightly on how the error has caused inconvenience to you.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly supports a single idea to maintain a high level of coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured and follows a logical order.
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Formal tone is maintained throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Greeting and closing statements are appropriate and polite.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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