Many of the medical problems that people are experiencing in today’s world are due to the fact that we have a very sedentary lifestyle. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
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believe that current medical
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and diseases are because of the lifestyle without any physical activities. While
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others believe that it is due to other reasons. I entirely agree with
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suggestion that our
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problems
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are because of our immovable lifestyle.
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, it is irrefutable that many more dangerous
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our
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. In the following paragraphs, I intend to outline the arguments of both sides.
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development of technology on our lifestyles. Technology makes
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feel more comfortable and helps them to do anything without moving. In
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modern
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advanced gadgets and devices are very popular.
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,
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will be less active and slowly stop working and even exercising.
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will lead to dangerous physical and mental
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issues.
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, you can shop from supermarkets and mini famous stores like Nike, Adidas and
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online nowadays. But, about a decade ago
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had to go to stores to shop
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they need and
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physical activities to get there. In the current
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you can buy anything you need with just a couple of clicks on your computer.
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, there are other
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that caused
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issues for humans.
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, The environment has been polluted with a lot of things especially the air that we breathe. The air is polluted with toxic gases and air pollution is one of the biggest obstacles that governments are facing today.
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, having a bad diet can rise of the risk of heart strokes massively. Eating too much fast food will enhance the amount of cholesterol in the blood and it could be deadly if you don’t prevent
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habit. After having considered the affirmation paragraphs in some depth, I have concluded that
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our medical
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nowadays are mainly because of our steady lifestyle, there are other
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that we can not overlook.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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