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Some claim that studying abroad has greater benefits for a student's home country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 globalized world, the majority of admission prefer studying abroad there can more benefits than their home country. I completely agree with
this
 idea and will discuss both views with advantages and disadvantages.
To begin
 with, it is true everyone strives to study abroad just because there are several reasons for
this
.
Firstly
, most
students
 all around the world wanna study abroad for their highest education, there are can improve their knowledge according to the global standards.
Furthermore
, another reason in the foreign countries the education system and level extremely high
such
 as, in the USA and UK, there located top universities and colleges ,
for instance
, MIT, Cambridge and Oxford universities. On the one hand, recruitment can meet with different nations and cultures, there are can improve their understanding of different cultures.
This
 will take their conversation on different routes and will help develop more confidence.
On the other hand
, studying abroad can open various ways for future
career
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 and
students
 can
tolearn
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learn
 think individual and stay strong
in
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 any
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.
Although
, why most people are striving to study abroad, there are can learn new techniques and strategies during their courses.
Moreover
, another important point, there
students
 after graduating their highest education can work to high salaries.
Furthermore
, it is true the
students
 prefer foreign countries
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 their own, the knowledge and skills that they acquire are superior. In conclusion, to my way of thinking studying abroad is definitely better, there are more benefits than
home
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 country.
Hence
, recruitment always have a win and win situation
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