Studying art in school also improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often believed that educating oneself with art, especially children will enhance their performance in academic achievements.
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, many people suggest that artwork education should be a mandatory subject in schools. I partially disagree with the statement and will substantiate my view in the course of the essay. To commence with, it is undeniable that art learning will improve various skills that might be beneficial in terms of the
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achievement of other subjects. Singing,
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,
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confidence levels.
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, other activities,
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as drawing and painting enhance imagination and creativity. In fact, there are various school institutions that encourage their pupils
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in extracurricular activities
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the benefits associated with it.
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, it should not be made a compulsory area in schools as it requires certain technical skills that might be lacking in many pupils. Being forced to
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artwork activities might be stressful and may have detrimental impacts on their concentration levels, resulting in an
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decrease in their core studies. If children,
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, are expected to take these mandated lessons as a part of their curriculum, they may find it challenging to excel in their other subjects
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the pressure a lot performing well in
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area. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic,
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it appears that there are several benefits of attaining education related to arts like enhancing social skills and academic grades, it might be mentally affecting the students who do not have sufficient talent required for it. I believe that art education should be optional as making it obligatory will do more harm than good.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Critical thinking
  • Motor skills
  • Creativity
  • Perspectives
  • Emotional outlet
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Global awareness
  • Historical art movements
  • Spatial intelligence
  • Curriculum overload
  • Non-competitive
  • Exposure
  • Cross-disciplinary benefits
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