Some people believe government should spend money in saving languages of few speaker from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give opinion.

People
have different views about whether money should be spent on saving rare
languages
or other more important matters. While preserving ancient dialects would be a positive movement, I believe that
further
investment in other priorities should be made
first
. On the one hand, it could be argued that rare dialects are at the brink of extinction because there are
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people
speaking them nowadays.
In particular
, globalization means communication has to be unified and individuals spend more time using popular
languages
like English, French, or Spanish to communicate with each other.
As a result
, it is hard to preserve
rare
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dialects of small communities. By protecting these
languages
we can keep the diversity of culture.
However
, I believe that spending money on other vital aspects is more important. One of the most pressing
concern
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is in-person social interaction. With the growth of
internet
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,
people
spend more time on
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online social media. Despite the benefits
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these platforms bring to
its
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users, more and more
people
choose to communicate through
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and neglect the face-to-face activities that we have done for thousands of years.
Therefore
, individuals start to lose their ability to handle
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daily interactions.
For example
, when observing a group of students at a local coffee shop, they spend more time playing on their
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than talking with each other. Most students reported that it is hard for them to initiate conversations so they prefer to talk through
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social platforms like Facebook, Whatsapp,
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In conclusion,
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preserving endangered
languages
of small communities is
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to promote cultural diversity. I am convinced that it is better to use government funding for others more urgent issues,
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such
as face-to-face social interaction.
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