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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. write a letter

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The supplied maps portray the news and the changes that happened in a distinct place between 1980 and nowadays. Overall, it's possible to observe that the park given was a private local,
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 it has opened to the community, becoming ideal for doing outdoor activities. In 1980, the park entrance had a wood gate surrounded by flowers on both sides.
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,
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 gate defines a unique and single path through all the complex.
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, there was a forest on the right as well as a small lake with benches around that.
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, many changes have happened since 1980. Nowadays,
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 of all, the place is open to all the local community
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 different paths have created to connect other parts of entertainments. Those ones are a huge food area, which was built replacing the forest, with desks and long wood chairs, where people can do a barbecue and picnic with their families. In front of
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, there is a sprawling field
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 being used for sports games like soccer. Meanwhile, on the left side of the park, the lake remains to promote a calm moment to chill out, with the same benches surrounding it,
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, just three of them rested to citizens sit.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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