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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle.What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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In
this
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 contemporary world, life has become fast-paced. In order to meet the speed of today's ,lifestyle
people
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 are opting for
food
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that is
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 ready to serve. It is advantageous as it saves
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 but its negative consequences for well-being cannot be overlooked.
This
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 essay is an attempt to address the convenience of fast
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 and
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its disadvantages for fitness.
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food food
 saves
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 and offers more
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 to work and study.
People
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 are leading a lifestyle
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 very busy. They do not have
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 to cook
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,
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 they either order
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 from restaurants or use canned and frozen foods which take less
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 to cook and eat. The offices and schools have canteens for junk
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. The students and workers do not have to get up early to make their
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 to eat in lunch breaks. They prefer to eat outside which gives them an extra hour of sleep in the morning. Contrary to the benefit of convenience
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, it has severe outcomes for health.
People
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 are leading a sedentary lifestyle and they do not have
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 to exercise and eating junk
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 on top of
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 making
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 obese.
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,
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 are suffering from diseases like
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 poisoning, cancer or digestive problems by eating canned foods. In conclusion,
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 eating fast
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 saves
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 but it is really bad for health causing deadly diseases.
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, the disadvantages outweigh the advantage of
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-saving.

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