Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
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apply
criminals
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such
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concern. Because, when
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apply
with
those Change preposition
in
activities
maybe
not perpetuate optimistic attitudes and behaviours. Correct your spelling
may
As well as
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apply
welcomed
them in any situation and the Wrong verb form
welcome
community
will be isolated
them Wrong verb form
isolate
according to
their previous behaviour.
Heavy criticism and expression about criminals
' acts
may have dreadful effects on the community
as well as
others. There are
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people
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Furthermore
they are only likely to act as a criminal because they can earn Add a comma
Furthermore,
money
in a fast way. They will only follow for money
. As well as
having to desire for money
they will be doing any activity without thinking about their reputation which may accelerate their internal aggression, ruthlessness, immorality, heated
actions Correct word choice
and heated
for
a wealthy person. So, no denying that Change preposition
toward
people
who come from poor-social
family backgrounds will tend to do those Correct your spelling
poor social
activities
due to
the lack of facilities and jealousy of others. Therefore
, they will be thoroughly bound with
those Change preposition
by
acts
to survive. For example
, the recent research article introduces criminals
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on all
why
they doing these Change preposition
of why
activities
again ; because of the lack of facilities, money
, starvation, the hunger they tend to mingle with those activities
to earn money
in a fast way.
Moreover
, Offenders and people
who come from criminals'
family backgrounds, Fix the agreement mistake
criminal'
communities
will be not welcomed and acceptedCorrect word choice
and communities
for
society to mingle Change preposition
by
with
any situation. Because they will be isolated, marginalised, Change preposition
in
discriminated
against Correct word choice
and discriminated
due to
the criminal acts
. They could not interact with a proper job as a good carrier. And under those ,circumstances criminals
never work with the community
. Then
it may boost hearted thoughts between them. They will kill them. It may accelerate internal aggression which may defeat criminals
' inner inborn skills in order to lack social welcome. For instance, Mose of offences have the inner skills, it may boost in prison bet without social welcome and isolation it will be destroyed.
To sum up
, people
who mingle with criminal action have to
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apply
not
chance to be a better person Correct your spelling
no
with
society Change preposition
in
due to
the
Correct article usage
apply
peoples'
stupid ideas. Change noun form
people's
Due to
the different consequences
they will not interact with the Add a comma
consequences,
community
. They will through interactions with those pathetic activities
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