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Band 7.5

Some people believe that housing is a basic human right for all individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that accommodation is an essential civil liberty for everyone.
This
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 essay strongly agrees with
this
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 statement because housing is necessary for human
dignity
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 and the physical and mental
health
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 of the person. Housing provides the basic needs to live in
dignity
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. Housing provides
people
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 with a sense of security and stability and is an essential element for living with
dignity
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.
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, without a home, a person loses their privacy and normal family life.
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, in the Syrian refugee crisis: millions of
people
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 have been forced to leave their homes and live in overcrowded camps that lack even the most basic amenities for privacy and normal life.
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 has prompted international organisations like the United Nations to affirm that housing is a basic human right that must be provided to protect human
dignity
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. Accommodation protects the body from diseases and, at the same time, improves
people
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’s mental
health
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. Having adequate housing protects against diseases associated with cold, heat or pollution.
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,
people
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 with stable housing are less likely to experience stress and depression than homeless
people
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.
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, in 2018, a World
Health
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 Organisation study with the London School of Hygiene and Tropical Medicine showed that better housing directly improves
health
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. Families moving from cold, damp homes to insulated housing experienced fewer respiratory illnesses like asthma and chest infections.
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, they reported better mental
health
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, as reduced exposure to coldness, dampness, and instability significantly lowered stress and enhanced
overall
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 well-being. In conclusion, suitable housing is a fundamental necessity for all, as it not only protects human
dignity
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 but
also
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 supports
people
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’s mental and physical well-being.

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task management
State a clear position in the first line and keep it in the rest of the essay.
critical thinking
Add one counter view and then show why your view is strong.
coherence
Use more link words to move from one idea to the next.
structure
Try to use shorter sentences sometimes and vary sentence form for balance.
development
Make sure every idea has a reason and an example to back it.
stance
The essay shows a clear choice in favor of housing as a right.
content
Good use of real world examples from Syria, WHO, and 2018 study.
organization
There is a clear start, middle and end with a simple plan.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal right
  • social security
  • sustainable housing
  • affordable housing
  • economic disparity
  • social welfare
  • public health
  • stability
  • government responsibility
  • poverty alleviation
  • moral obligation
  • ethical responsibility
  • human dignity
  • social equity
  • basic necessity
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