Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

As it enunciated by proportion,
criminals
always be a criminal after doing
such
pathetic
situation
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. Owing to various social and personal considerations I thoroughly agree with
this
concern. Because, when engaging with those
activities
maybe not perpetuated as
an
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optimistic attitudes and behaviours. As well as, society will be not welcomed them in any situation and the
community
will be isolated them according to their previous behaviour. Heavy criticism and expression about
criminals
'
acts
may have
calamitous
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for the
community
as well as others. There are validated evidence to prove that
people
who mingle with criminal
acts
they
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will be not
a
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good person anymore.
They
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only likely to act as a criminal because they can earn
money
in a fast way. They will only follow for
money
. As well as having to desire for
money
they will be doing any activity without thinking about their reputation which may accelerate their internal aggression, ruthlessness, immorality, hearted actions for
a
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wealthy
people
. So, no denying that,
people
who come from
the
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poor-social family backgrounds
they
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will tend to do those
activities
due to the lack of facilities and jealousy of others.
Therefore
, they will be thoroughly bound with those
acts
to survive.
For example
, the recent research article introduces
criminal
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behind reasons, it may elaborate all other aspects, why they doing these
activities
again ; because of the lack of facilities,
money
, starvation, the hunger they tend to mingle with those
activities
to earn
money
in a fast way.
Moreover
, Offenders and
people
who come from
criminals
' family backgrounds, communities will be not welcomed and accepted
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for society to mingle with any situation. Because they will be isolated, marginalised, discriminated against due to the criminal
acts
. They could not interact with a proper job as a good carrier. And under those, circumstances
criminals
never work with the
community
.
Then
it may boost hearted thoughts between them. They will kill them. It may accelerate internal aggression which may defeat
criminals
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inner inborn skills in order to lack social welcome.
For instance
, most the offences have inner skills, it may boost in prison bet without social welcome and isolation it will be destroyed. To sum up,
people
who mingle with criminal action have
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not
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chance to be a better person with society due to the peoples’ stupid ideas. Due to the
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consequences they will not interact with the
community
. They will through interactions with those pathetic
activities
.
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  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • recidivism
  • therapy
  • stigmatization
  • reoffending
  • accountability
  • support programs
  • proactive steps
  • personal choice
  • societal barriers
  • reform
  • transformation
  • opportunities
  • environment
  • social support
  • success stories
  • examples
  • criminal behavior
  • stereotype
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