Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
would argue that adolescent
years
are considered to be happiest in many
people
's lives, while others say that being mature brings happiness even though it comes with numerous responsibilities.
Although
juveniles lead to freedom
life
, I believe that adult
life
brings more delight as they are financially independent. On the one hand, young
people
are extremely cheerful during youthful is because they live fewer responsibilities.
That is
to say that, teenagers are not expected to earn
money
and afford to pay bills for any expenses, as adulthood are there to fulfil any of their duty.
As a result
, they are free to play, study and appreciate their
life
without any obligations.
For example
, in
Sweden
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young
people
feel more delighted during their
life
are the best
years
because they were not worried about anything
especially
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finances.
However
, I believe that adolescent is under pressure to achieve their education in their academic
years
while in crucial
life
at college.
On the other hand
, despite adulthood
carries
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more responsibility,
people
are the happiest because they are not dependent on anyone for their finances.
However
, they are earning income, which gives them liberty.
Therefore
, a well-established career allows them to save and on luxuries spend
money
on things they want for themselves and their family members.
For instance
,
people
in Norway were happy when turned into adults because they could earn
money
and purchase an item they adore to. I believe that a sense of ability is achieved by earning
money
which makes
people
happy and free. In conclusion,
although
most believe that adolescent
years
are the happiest
years
of one's
life
as they are not under pressure, being mature brings more content despite enormous responsibilities because
people
are financially independent.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

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