Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Some
people
Use synonyms
would argue that adolescent
years
Use synonyms
are considered to be happiest in many
people
Use synonyms
's lives, while others say that being mature brings happiness even though it comes with numerous responsibilities.
Although
Linking Words
juveniles lead to freedom
life
Use synonyms
, I believe that adult
life
Use synonyms
brings more delight as they are financially independent. On the one hand, young
people
Use synonyms
are extremely cheerful during youthful is because they live fewer responsibilities.
That is
Linking Words
to say that, teenagers are not expected to earn
money
Use synonyms
and afford to pay bills for any expenses, as adulthood are there to fulfil any of their duty.
As a result
Linking Words
, they are free to play, study and appreciate their
life
Use synonyms
without any obligations.
For example
Linking Words
, in
Sweden
Add a comma
,Sweden
show examples
young
people
Use synonyms
feel more delighted during their
life
Use synonyms
are the best
years
Use synonyms
because they were not worried about anything
especially
Add the comma(s)
,especially
show examples
finances.
However
Linking Words
, I believe that adolescent is under pressure to achieve their education in their academic
years
Use synonyms
while in crucial
life
Use synonyms
at college.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, despite adulthood
carries
Wrong verb form
carrying
show examples
more responsibility,
people
Use synonyms
are the happiest because they are not dependent on anyone for their finances.
However
Linking Words
, they are earning income, which gives them liberty.
Therefore
Linking Words
, a well-established career allows them to save and on luxuries spend
money
Use synonyms
on things they want for themselves and their family members.
For instance
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
in Norway were happy when turned into adults because they could earn
money
Use synonyms
and purchase an item they adore to. I believe that a sense of ability is achieved by earning
money
Use synonyms
which makes
people
Use synonyms
happy and free. In conclusion,
although
Linking Words
most believe that adolescent
years
Use synonyms
are the happiest
years
Use synonyms
of one's
life
Use synonyms
as they are not under pressure, being mature brings more content despite enormous responsibilities because
people
Use synonyms
are financially independent.
Submitted by gorgeousnf on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
    What to do next:
    Look at other essays: