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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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Introduction
In recent times, many
people
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 are concerned about their
safety
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 around the nations despite the decline of crimes. While others say that feel less safe than previous, I believe that, the increase in
unemployment
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 and the lack of
government
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 interest in
security
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.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand,
people
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 having fears about their
safety
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 is rising in recent times.
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,
unemployment
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 who does not have a meaning of livelihood are likely to do dreadful activities to provide for their basic needs.
Body paragraph 2
To illustrated an increase in
unemployment
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 in the
last
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 several years, these unemployed workers might be left with no options other than involve themselves in criminal.
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, is the
government
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 lack
of
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an attitude towards the
security
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 of the nations.
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,
this
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 does not appear to be the case.
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, around the globe Western countries where
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have less
security
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 and up-to-date equipment required to combat crimes. These issues have reduced the level of confidence of the citizens regarding their
safety
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.
Body paragraph 3
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, despite the fact that the
government
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 should provide employment opportunities for its citizens.
This
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 could be done by providing low-interest loans and grants for the unemployed with consultant business plans and
also
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 encouraging them to become entrepreneurs.
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, around the world especially,
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America was able to reduce crime rates with involved the
unemployment
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 and crime reduced significantly.
Therefore
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, the
government
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 should protect its citizens and invest.
This
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 could be done by employing efficient
security
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, organizing and providing them with the latest equipment in preventing crimes
as a result
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people
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 would feel safer.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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people
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 fear for their
safety
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, the issue can be solved through the
government
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 tackling
unemployment
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 issues and providing the equipment needed to prevent crime increases as well.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • availability heuristic
  • media coverage
  • misinformation
  • urbanization
  • community cohesion
  • justice system
  • economic inequality
  • community policing
  • media literacy
  • surveillance
  • swift justice
  • social cohesion
  • neighborhood watch
  • deterrent
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