Many people today find it difficult to balance the demands of their work and personal life. What are the causes of this situation, and what can individuals and employers do to reduce the problem? You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Music

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probable

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one thing

could

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that could

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merge

people

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in various cultures and

generation

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generations

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together. From my point of view, I strongly agree with

this

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statement and I will give reasons in

this

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essay below. Regarding the

first

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, there is no boundary for

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, simply because,

music

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or performing all over the world show

big

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a big

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range of

music

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style

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styles

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which

rely

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relies

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on culture, location or language.

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everyone

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able

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is able

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to enjoy the beauty of

music

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from melody, rhythm without language knowledge.

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and my friends love listening

Japanese

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to Japanese

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song

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from manga, a cartoon in Japanese style, even we do not understand the meaning but we

still

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are still

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happy and dance while listening to the

song

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which

impact

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our feeling.  According to

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idea, another best example is

everyone

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sing

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singing

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‘Happy

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the ‘Happy

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Birthday’

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Birthday

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song

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in birthday before

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the blow

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blow

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blowing

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the candle. Even though

people

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from different countries

are not speak

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do not speak

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only

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English but

this

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song

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brings

everyone

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to celebrate a birthday party. Another reason I hold

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view,

music

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is similar to fashion. Some

one-hit wonder

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songs are still on

air

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the air

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radio

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the radio

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internet

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the internet

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also

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launches in remastered or covered version.

People

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in different generations enjoy the same

song

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the

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apply

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different

period

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periods

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of time.

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, The Beatles, an English rock band which

popular

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was popular

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70’s

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, I happy to

listen

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tolisten

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their whole album all day and sing along with my parent, as they are

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apply

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big fans of The Beatles when they are a teenager. In conclusion, I definitely believe that the variety of

music

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is valuable for

everyone

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, no matter where there are in the corner of the world or which age they are, young, mature or elder. The majority of

people

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understand and enjoy

music

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which is a universal interesting art piece from their experience.

Music

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connects

people

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together.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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301 words

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