The key to solving environmental problems is for the present generation to sacrifice their convenient lifestyle for the sake of future generations. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, Problems related to the
environment
are rising with the development of the country's economy. Some individuals
are arguing
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that compromising a convenient
lifestyle
is the ultimate solution for future generations. I completely disagree with the fact that
this
type of change brings convenience to the future generation. People today are using their own transportation for travelling for different purposes in their lives. because of
this
, there is mass consumption of fuels and
this
portraiting the future scenario. For ,Example People shifted their way to travel to the
innovated
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electric vehicles from traditional ways. In fact,
this
adjustment in their
lifestyle
not only
benefit
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benefits
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them by lowering their costs
,
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but
has
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a positive impact on the
environment
at no
significate
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significant
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burden on them.
In addition
, progress in technology makes it easy to save the
environment
with a slight change in
lifestyle
with no reduction in the comfort level.
For instance
, biodegradable plastics have been recently invented to replace the old thin plastic products that pollute the
environment
. The new product has the exact
function
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as the older ones. So there would be no discomfort by transition made,
while
still managing to contribute to protecting the
environment
.
On the other hand
, there are some changes in the
lifestyle
that
lesson
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the convenience of the current generation. Take
for instance
the use of air transportation which
release
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releases
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tons of carbon dioxide many times more than a good journey over some distance does.
However
, most individuals are not frequent travellers and
this
change would not bring so many negative consequences to their convenience but a huge positive impact on the
environment
.
To conclude
, whilst I believe that the present generation needs to make
lifestyle
changes to reduce environmental progress, I disagree that term advance will be a burden to them,
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