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To meet the growing needs of food for the increasing population, country should make use of edible insects as foods. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but affect negatively the nature too. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a continuing argument about whether
government
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 should approve eating
insects
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 to solve the problem of the shortage of food
resource
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. Many
people
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 consider it beneficial, while others hold different opinions. In
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 explain both
negative
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 and positive effects of intaking
insects
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. Bugs can have great
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, but they can
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 make
people
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 sick.
People
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 believe that insect is one of the good
resource
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 of protein, which is one of the vital elements for
human
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a human
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 being.
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, there is a high chance that they carry bacteria in their bodies. If we eat any of them without proper cleaning methods, we may be ill.
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, stomachache, fever, and dizziness are all the symptoms that can happen to us once the bacteria
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 in our body. Eating is supposed to bring energy
for
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 our organs, not to break down the
immute
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immune
 system. There is a wide range of
insects
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 in the world, but the experts have not learned
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every one
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 of them yet. Some
people
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 think that
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 is an exciting fact because we can always discover new
flavors
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.
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, with the various spices
among
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 the world, it is likely to season
insects
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 into tasty snacks.
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, cockroach barbeque is sold as street food in South East Asia.
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, not understanding all the attributes of every
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insects
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insect
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 means that it is possible to consume poisonous species by accident. It can be risky to start putting
insects
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 in the cusine before we acquire enough knowledge. To sum up, adding
insects
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in
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to
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 the dish can bring proteins and new
flavors
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 to food.
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, we can get sick from the bacteria or be poisoned due to the lack of knowledge.

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