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The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs enormous government expenditure. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that renovating the old
buildings
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 in major cities around the globe costs a huge amount of
money
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 from the government. While
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 others think that
money
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 should
be utilize
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 in developing
roads
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 and new houses. I strongly agree with the maintenance of historic
buildings
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 to improve the economy of the country. Admittedly, renovating a historic building that was famous in the century is one way to attract local and international tourists to visit that place.
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 is to ameliorate the economy of the country by providing jobs to the
local
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.
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, Malacanang of the North is a popular visitors destination in the Philippines, it is where the former president Marcos and his family lived. The building was surrounded by a lake which added beauty to that place.
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renowned-building
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renowned building
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 attract visitors around the globe and
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 visited as of today.
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, it adds revenue to
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 to improve
roads
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 and public infrastructures.
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, other individuals perceive that
money
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 should
be spend
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in
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 public infrastructures for the citizen to utilize.
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,
roads
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 should be maintained by using concrete and asphalt
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to
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 remote areas.
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, helps the
local
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locals
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 to travel to the city and attract local and international tourists to visit a particular place.
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, investing
to
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in
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 public
buildings
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such
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 as schools is one way to enhance and engage the learning of students to finish their studies. In conclusion,
while
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some individuals
asserts
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 that government
money
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 should be used in
infractures
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fractures
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 as
roads
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 and public
buildings
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 . I believe that maintaining and renovating historic places are assets
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that boost
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 the economy and raise the standard
living
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of living
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 of the nation.
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