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SOme countries are considering imposing curfews in whicgh tenenagers will not be allowed outdoors at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this policy

Few nations are opined to implement new rules like curfew to limit the teenagers who tend to walk in streets at
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 could give some positive effects like the limitation of drug trafficking and sex offences ,
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 will impact their future in a negative way because of the factors like a limitation of education and free-thinking .
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 ,
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 writer completely disagrees with the given notion.
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 with , when we consider violations, about 90% of them take
place
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 at
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 . Unfortunately , teenagers are the main victims of these crimes since they were not mature enough to understand them. For ,example according to a report published by the World Bank , 55% of the victims of violation were juvenile in the
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 decade and
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 has impacted negatively on their future .Since
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 , most governments around the globe, try to limit
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 by implementing new laws like curfews.
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 , apart from crimes, there are many good things that are taking
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 at
night
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 like education and entertainment.
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 , with the globalisation of the training system most international conferences may take
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 at midnight in some areas . At the same time , entertainment , like music and dance , which are vital for building up the creativity of the young generation would take
place
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 mainly at midnight .
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 , the world-famous dancing competition , "Indian idol'' takes
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 at
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 and it has been a platform for many Indian actors to enter their carries .
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 of implementing these laws , these positive factors will affect badly . In conclusion,
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 there are some positive effects on society like control of crime , implementing new laws on young generation like curfew at
night
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 will badly affect their creativity and education . Since
then
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,
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 writer is in complete disagreement with the fact that implementing curfew on teenagers at
night
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