Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society . other , however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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children
should be
good
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member
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society
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, other
people
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teaching is important so they can be
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Parents
want to give
children
good manners so they can be good members of
society
.
parents
should ask their
children
to participate in every activity of the
society
so a good relationship is formed between all the
children
and all your
people
call him a good man .
parents
should be taught to stay in the good work in the
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society
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people
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study in school .so the teacher wants to teach . the teacher wants to give the book related knowledge of the
society
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society
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children
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people
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parents
should be given teaching because
children
have only a short time to go to school .
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,
children
spend more time with their
parents
should teach
children
so they are good members of
society
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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