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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society . other , however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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Some
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 should be
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member
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society
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 but
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 think that teaching is given by his
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however
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, other
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 is teaching by school Overall,
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children
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 teaching is important so they can be
good
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member
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society
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Parents
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 want to give
children
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 good manners so they can be good members of
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 .
parents
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 should ask their
children
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 to participate in every activity of the
society
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 so a good relationship is formed between all the
children
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 and all your
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 call him a good man .
parents
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 should be taught to stay in the good work in the
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children's
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society
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. Some
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 true because
children
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 study in school .so the teacher wants to teach . the teacher wants to give the book related knowledge of the
society
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 .in
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society
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,
children
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 should do activities that make them good
people
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.
children
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 have activities related to the
Society
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 in the study so they can be good members with the study. I think
perents
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parents
 should be given teaching because
children
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 have only a short time to go to school .
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,
children
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 spend more time with their
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 should teach
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 so they are good members of
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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