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Some people say that in all levels of education,from primary schools to universities, too much of time is spent on learning facts and not enough on practical skill. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #levels #education #schools #universities #time #facts #skill
It is undeniable many nations are learning of education gives rise to
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 of the modern world called education. Some individuals that in all types of education in primary school to universities, too much on learning facts and not enough on practical skill. I firmly agree with the statement because of the better
knowledge
 and
experience
 provided in
schools
.
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where
schools
 is a part of
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. A lot of teachers and
students
 there
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 various
knowledge
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 are put forward to support the view of imparting more fact-based
knowledge
 by the academic institutions rather than hands-on
experience
.
Firstly
, there are
schools
 of science subjects in practical practice by the laboratory. It is generally believed that theories are needed to be learned as they are the base of any practical
knowledge
.
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, there are many colleges in
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 in the
experience
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On the other hand
, the importance of theories, we cannot ignore the role played by the practical skills in a person's life. Many nations are now updating themselves by providing
students
 with hands-on exposure as companies in today's competitive world are in search of individuals who can apply what they have learned from the facts.
Furthermore
, some practical skills can open the doors for part-time employment for the
students
 undergoing financial crisis thereby leading their families to sustain their living. In conclusion, I agree because of the
knowledge
 and
experience
 not only to
schools
 provided but
also
 better job opportunities of deep fundamental
knowledge
 of any subjects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • education system
  • curriculum
  • factual knowledge
  • practical skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem solving
  • academic achievement
  • real-world application
  • balance
  • integration
  • learning outcomes
  • employment opportunities
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