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You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter give details about the concert describe how you won the tickets explain why you’ve chosen your friend to go with you. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___________

#two #tickets #concert #friend #you’ve #___________
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Dear Jen, I'm writing to let you know that I have won two
tickets
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 to a concert, and was wondering if you'd like to go with me. The concert is hosted by Zomato,
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 Sunday
9
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at 9
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PM, at the BKC ground in Mumbai. The performer is one of the most famous bands of all time, MLTR. To win the
tickets
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, I had to call George, who was our batchmate from school and
current
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the current
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 executive producer of the event
,
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apply
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 and
requested
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 him for a
favor
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. He
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 directed me to his assistant, who invited me to directly meet Michael from the band. After meeting him, he gave me free
tickets
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 to
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 concert and I have never been happier in my life. I remember you used to listen to an entire playlist of MLTR on loop,
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, I couldn't think of
any one
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anyone
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 else but you when I got these
tickets
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.
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, my sister is going to come
for
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to
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 the show from the US after
long
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a long
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 time, and she wanted to see you as well. So I decided to ask you if you'd be available for the show
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 weekend. Let me know if you're able to come. Best wishes, Nilesh
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While the letter is well-organized, consider giving more details about the concert experience to make it more engaging.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph sticks to a single idea; for instance, combining your sister's visit with the invitation might be split for clarity.
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The writing tone is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend, which effectively conveys warmth and excitement.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens and closes appropriately, giving it a well-rounded feel.
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