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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

#quality #life #cities
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In
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 modern time, the overall health and well-being of the residents are declining in huge urbanized communities. There are various reasons for
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 phenomenon as well as actions that may be proposed to mitigate
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 change. Arguably, numerous possibilities are perceived to affect an individual’s quality of
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. Primarily, it is greatly affected by a person’s
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. It is known that employment in metropolitan regions demands more time and energy because of the competition and longer working hours. Particularly in companies with 24-hour services
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 as healthcare, hospitality, transportation, and tourism industries.
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 results in physical and psychological exhaustion to city-dwellers.
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, people often feel isolated from society because of the fast-paced
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 in these areas. They are unable to attend social activities or events in their locality, and they do not even know their
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.
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, there is no sense of community or belongingness. A person’s satisfaction is notably influenced by the high cost of living in the metro which is because of the law of demand and supply. These areas have higher rates in terms of home rental or ownership compared to that of the countryside.
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 homeownership becomes a struggle in these places.
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, a variety of strategies to address the issue can be initiated and implemented to successfully sustain and improve the person’s general degree of contentment or
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 in
life
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. Companies can be encouraged to craft policies that will safeguard the welfare of employees. It may include ensuring that the employees will be consulted for any major changes that might affect them like workloads and working hours and shifts. Breaks during the shift and considering alternative
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 arrangements or schemes must
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 be prioritized to increase staff productivity and
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 retention. There should
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 be facilities for recreation and for social gatherings like parks, clubhouses, and conference halls where events and activities can be held to encourage community participation even in the busy streets of the metro.
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, to address issues in the high cost of housing, payment schemes with low interests and longer terms can be offered by the government.
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 will help them achieve a sense of
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 and be comfortable living within the city. Living in an important economic, cultural and social
center
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 of a region can have benefits and drawbacks to an individual and the society. It has a significant influence on the people’s perception of their position in
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 in relation to their standards and goals which is notably plummeting. The factors are the physical demands of their
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, the sense of belongingness in the community, and the standard of living.
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, interventions can be done to prevent the problem from
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 progressing through the development of policies, infrastructure, and homeownership systems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overpopulation
  • Strained resources
  • Commute times
  • Economic stress
  • Community events
  • Affordable housing
  • Environmental regulations
  • Green spaces
  • Urban environments
  • Socialize
  • Foster
  • Tackle
  • Strategies
  • Implementing
  • Pollution
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