Some people feel that the government should regulate the level of violent influence on TV and at the cinema. Others feel that violent films should not be regulated. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, bad effects from scenes in some
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are inevitable. Society often argues that the
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should make regulations toward violent
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, others think regulating these
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is not important. It seems to me that
government
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should regulate the violence level of cinema.
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essay will discuss the views of both arguments.
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with, generally, people like to watch full movies rather than censored movies with some cutting on violent scenes. By giving some censorship in part of the
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, the audience will confuse with the flow of the
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. Some brutal acting might be the climax part which plays an important role in the show.
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, an action
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from Korea called murder was trending in Indonesia a year ago. Due to censored regulation, the
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has to follow the rule.
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phenomenon affected the rating of
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show. Most Indonesian gave less than 6 out of 10 stars. That was sad because
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the
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was great, it reveals
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the actual story of
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person but the audience did not satisfy as some parts got cut. In stark contrast to
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, the
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as a regulator should decide wisely the rule on brutal
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with some consideration on the audience's point of view.
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, People can copy and learn violent stuff from the
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. They can have some imaginations while watching the
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and later can apply
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brutal action to others in their life.
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, regulating the standard of violence is
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a good decision.
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can categorize which movies belong to small, medium and high brutal scenes. When it comes to high brutal
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, only 21-year-old people can watch the
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. For a small part of violence, all ages can watch the
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. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm that both opinions have their own implication. I believe by making a rule on
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issue, our
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industry will be more developed than ever before.

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