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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the development of an
island
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 in terms of the tourist
facilities
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’
constructions
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construction
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.
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, a comparison of
two
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the two
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 maps reveals the main noticeable construction focuses on additional accommodations and public
transportations
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transportation
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such
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 as dock and vehicle tracks
while
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 before the
island
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 do not have any
facilities
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 at all. Before the construction, the
island
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 consists of coconut plants that grow in several places of the
island
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while
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 the majority of the land is empty spaces without any noticeable
facilities
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 or even plants. After the construction, the most dramatic improvement is the establishment of accommodation and public
facilities
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. The
center
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 of the
facilities
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 is a reception building where the vehicle track is established
surrounded
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surrounding
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 it and the group of houses are placed
in
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on
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 the right and left side of
this
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 building where they are built in a circle.
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, each house is connected
with
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by
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 footpaths. Other
facilities
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 are a restaurant and a pier
that is
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 installed on the north and south side of the reception building, respectively.
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 most of the
facilities
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 are constructed that cover two-thirds of the
island
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, there is still empty land that remained the same without any buildings there.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, facilities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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