IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping center near your home. Write a letter to the council. In your letter • say how you heard about the plan • explain how you feel about it • ask for more information about it Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir, I am writing you
this
 letter in connection with the news I read about
construction
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 of new shopping complex by your company. A day before today Chairman of
Municiple
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Municipal
 committee has informed me regarding
such
 construction of
building
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the building
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.
Since
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couple
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 of
decades
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this
 particular area of our town has
well
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 developed and most of the families residing in our society
belongs
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 to highly qualified professionals. Residents of our colony
has
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 been addicted to living in
less
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 crowded and less
disturbance
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disturbing
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enviroment
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environment
. The people of our community
believes
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 that the making of new building going to have an impact on their daily work routines. On behalf of other community
members
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 I would like to ask you,
provide
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 us
the
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with the
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 information about the deadline to complete the building.
Furthermore
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 it would be very gentle if you share
us
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with us
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 the planning of
parking
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the parking
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 site being created by
Architect
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the Architect
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. The citizen of our area are mostly vegetarian and it would be
your
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apply
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most welcome if you drop the idea of having
Pub
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a Pub
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 and Bar in your complex. Once built, the closing time of
complex
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the complex
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 is very crucial as we highly recommended to close it by 9 in the evening
everyday
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. Forwarding it for a positive response from your side. Yours faithfully, Mark.
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