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In Spite Of The Advances Made In Agriculture, Many People Still Go Hungry

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In recent years the Agriculture department has seen numerous advances in the
research
 field
nevertheless
 many
people
 around the world go hungry,
Wastage
 of
food
, Economic problems and the increased Population play a major role in causing
this
 catastrophe. In the below ,paragraphs we will Analyse different aspects of
this
 issue and a solution to
this
 problem will be proposed.
Firstly
, In numerous developed
countries
,
People
 buy
food
 more than they could actually consume,
for instance
, in the US alone 37% of
food
 ordered in restaurants goes to
wastage
,
Similarly
, When family cook meals at home they prepare meals more than they can eat,
Moreover
,
Instead
 of eating the same foodstuff again after few hours they cook prefer to eat fresh cuisine
instead
 of eating leftovers, and they waste everything they have cooked before.
In addition
, Even though
food
 is available in underdeveloped
countries
,
people
 can'
t
 afford it because of economical issues. For ,example In Africa every
third
 child sleeps hungry at night because they can'
t
 afford a single meal a day, Economical problems are causing
such
 issues in undeveloped communities,
However
, the amount of
research
 is
also
 less in many less developed
countries
 because of economical issues,
Therefore
, these
countries
 can'
t
 afford to invest on
research
 programs. In conclusion, I will offer a solution to tackle
this
 problem, there should be a mechanism to transport the
wastage
food
 from developed
countries
 to underdeveloped societies, as it is the need of the hour to manage
food
wastage
 and to provide the same
food
 to those
people
 who can'
t
 afford it,
Research
 ideas can
also
 be shared between
countries
 to remove hunger from
this
 world.
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