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In Spite Of The Advances Made In Agriculture, Many People Still Go Hungry

#spite #advances #agriculture #people
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In recent years the Agriculture department has seen numerous advances in the
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 field
nevertheless
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 many
people
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 around the world go hungry,
Wastage
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 of
food
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, Economic problems and the increased Population play a major role in causing
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 catastrophe. In the below ,paragraphs we will Analyse different aspects of
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 issue and a solution to
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 problem will be proposed.
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, In numerous developed
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,
People
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 buy
food
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 more than they could actually consume,
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, in the US alone 37% of
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 ordered in restaurants goes to
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,
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, When family cook meals at home they prepare meals more than they can eat,
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,
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 of eating the same foodstuff again after few hours they cook prefer to eat fresh cuisine
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 of eating leftovers, and they waste everything they have cooked before.
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, Even though
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 is available in underdeveloped
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,
people
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 can'
t
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 afford it because of economical issues. For ,example In Africa every
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 child sleeps hungry at night because they can'
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 afford a single meal a day, Economical problems are causing
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 issues in undeveloped communities,
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, the amount of
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 is
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 less in many less developed
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 because of economical issues,
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, these
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 can'
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 afford to invest on
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 programs. In conclusion, I will offer a solution to tackle
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 problem, there should be a mechanism to transport the
wastage
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food
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 from developed
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 to underdeveloped societies, as it is the need of the hour to manage
food
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wastage
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 and to provide the same
food
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 to those
people
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 who can'
t
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 afford it,
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 ideas can
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 be shared between
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 to remove hunger from
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 world.
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