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Some people think distance learning can replace school do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays internet become an important part of today's generation . But when it comes to whether distance learning can replace schools
then
 there is conflict among people .I believe that online learning cannot replace
School
.
Firstly
school
 is a place where we learn many things. A child starts his learning process from his house after that he pursued in
school
.
School
 provides the student proper learning environment
hence
 they will not get disturbed by their brother-sister and anyone of the family members during
school
 hours and they learn things with full concentration. ,
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 children learn many other things
also
 apart from education like sharing leadership good ethics and many more .
For example
 in education organizations
students
 sit with many children where they learn sharing habits like his on her friend is asking for something
then
 immediately they are ready to share their article as well as they
also
 learn how to talk without hesitation due to the
school
 environment. On the other ,hand if we talked about online learning they have both prawns and cons. Distance learning may useful for those
students
 who are not having any
school
 facility nearby them but it does not provide the appropriate environment as
students
 are getting in
school
 as well as
students
 cut from the social life because online they stay at home only where they will find their family members
as a result
 of that social development will not take place among them. In ,
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conclusion I strongly state that distance learning cannot replace schools as they are not able to contribute to the overall development of the child.
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