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Many supermarkets sell more and more imported food products than ones produced in their home country. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, a lot of
supermarkets
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 have decided to highlight imported
food
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 over the local ones and in my opinion,
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 market strategy had more drawbacks than benefits.
First
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 of all, I want to highlight the disadvantages because I believe that, they could trigger many issues in the country. When the big
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 decided to not support local
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, they are against the hard work of the countryside workers.
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, local
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, are healthy due to the fact that producers do not use preservatives to keep them fresh. In consequence, if
supermarkets
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 do not sell them, the citizens will do not have the opportunity to buy them.
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, I believe that, if
supermarkets
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 sell more local
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, the local economy
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 can be improved. The more local
products
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 they sell, the more wealth the country had. Usually, local
food
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 is used to cook typical dishes, on that basis, supporting local
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 means
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 supporting and keeping the traditions. I think that
supermarkets
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 find more economic advantages than disadvantages in
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 decision. Usually, the prices of imported
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 are low than local
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, in consequence, the more imported
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 they buy, the more benefit they will gain.
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, as users, we have more possibilities and options from choosing.
This
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 sells strategy, give us in our hands the opportunity to have all that we want in one shell.
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, an American citizen could cook a Thailand dish and vice versa. In conclusion, in the effort to support the local economy,
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 should
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 support and improve local
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 and
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, and the decision to do the opposite could have several consequences in a nearly future
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