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Some people believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop children's life skills than time spent reading. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The bar graph delineates the change in weekly
distance
 travelled by a countryman in the UK in 1990 and 2000 using five specified modes of transport. Overall, it is apparent that, while there was a marginal rise in total
kilometeres
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kilometres
 travelled by air, bus and rail; bicycle and motorbike had lost some popularity leading to a decline in
distance
 travelled using the two-wheelers. The statistics provided in the bar graph made it evident that travel by public transport (bus and rail)
reamained
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remained
 a majority portion of per capita
distance
 travelled per week both in 1990 and 2000, with a minor
inscrease
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increase
in
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 the beginning of 21st century.
On the other hand
,
distance
 covered through air travel has risen considerably in 2000 as compared
its
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 proportion in the year 1990.
In contrast
, usage of bicycle and motorbike not only remained
all time
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 low during 1990 and 2000 (just below 5kms, to be precise), it
further
 plummeted to become negligible by the dawn of
new
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 millennium
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