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The bar graph delineates the change in the weekly
distance
 travelled by
a individuals
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individuals
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 in the UK in 1990 and 2000 using five specified modes of transport. Overall, it is apparent that, while there was a marginal rise in total
kilometers
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kilometres
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 travelled by air, bus and rail; bicycle and motorbike had lost some popularity leading to a decline in
distance
 travelled using them.
Furthermore
, the statistics provided in the bar graph made it evident that travel by on-road public transport (bus and rail) remained a major portion of the per capita
distance
 travelled per week both in 1990 and 2000, with a minor
inscrease
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increase
 at the beginning of the 21st century.
On the other hand
, the
distance
 covered through air travel has risen considerably in 2000 as compared to its proportion in the year 1990.
In contrast
, the usage of
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
motorbike
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motorbikes
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 not only remained at an all-time low both in 1990 and 2000 (just below 5kms, to be precise), it
further
 plummeted to become negligible by the end of the
second
 millennium.
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