Education is the single most important for a develop country.

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I have been aware of the difference between developed and undeveloped countries. There is a worldwide concern on how to become one. Some people claim
education
is one of the most relevant solutions for helping countries to develop. There are two main ways of making a country greater and fair. In
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education
is an excellent tool to become a developed country.
First
,
education
provides opportunities to get a better job. New knowledge and learning different perspectives help people to grow intellectually and be able to develop different tasks in any field. The more training someone gets and the more capable they would be to take any job or responsibility in society.
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, most companies are more likely to accept certified and
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candidates in their companies.
In addition
,
education
gives you good judgment to make better decisions. Proper judgment would come from being exposed to a wide range of information. Reading and studying help people to build a big
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of different things.
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means that they will have enough knowledge for taking a personal point of view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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