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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
It is widely discussed should the state provide its
people
 with free
education
 and healthcare or not. In my opinion, everyone should have the opportunity to get schooling and health care at no cost. Government is a social institution responsible for setting rules and enforcing them to help
people
. I believe that every authority should always remember that it exists for the community.
People
 are paying taxes and, in exchange, the government helps them. And because the nation is a priority for the ministry,
education
 and health care should be a priority in the state budget, it is the main human right.
Furthermore
, educated and healthy
people
 will help a country to develop, to improve its economy, and replenish the state budget. But I think that commercial universities and clinics should
also
 exist because monopoly, especially government monopoly, is always a bad idea. There should be some competition and sponsorship in quantity enough for the provision of
education
 and health services at an adequate level. Not all countries have enough money in the budget for free
education
 and medicine for all citizens. In
this
 case, I assume it should invest at least some amount of money to provide
people
 with some basic medical services and sponsorship in the university. Financing of
education
 should be provided for
people
 who are ready to study hard for it. In conclusion, I think free medicine and
education
 should be the goal of every authority, it is beneficial for both country and
people
. If the economy of a country is not on a good level yet, free learning and medicine should be available for the society that needs them.
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