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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that governments should levy a tariff on
junk
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food
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 because the number of health risks associated with consuming
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 kind of
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 is on the rise. I agree that a higher rate of tax should be paid by fast-
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 companies.
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, alcohol and tobacco companies already pay higher
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 and
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, higher
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 could raise prices and lower consumption. Higher excise on liqueur and cigarettes has proven to be successful at curbing the harm caused by these substances.
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 revenue has been used to treat health problems associated with these products and has proven useful in advertising campaigns warning
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 about the dangers of alcohol and tobacco abuse. Tax from fast
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 could be used in the same way. The United Kingdom is a prime example, where money from smokers is used to treat lung cancer and heart disease. Increasing
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 would raise prices and lower consumption. Fast
food
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 companies would pass on these
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 to consumers in the form of higher prices and
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 would lead to
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 not being able to afford
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food
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 because it is too expensive.
Junk
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food
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 would soon become a luxury item and it would only be consumed occasionally, which would be less harmful to the general public’s health.
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, the cost of organic
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 has proven prohibitively expensive for most
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 and
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 why only a small percentage of the population buy it regularly. In conclusion,
junk
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food
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 should be taxed at a higher rate because of the good precedent set by alcohol and tobacco and the fact that the increased cost should reduce the
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 of fast-
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people
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 buy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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