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Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to secure a good job. Others believe that employers value work experience more than a university degree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #university #job #employers #value #work
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It is not a secret that all people need, at some time in their life,
to begin
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 to
work
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, dreaming to find a great
job
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.
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, exist an interesting discussion about what the employers are looking for,
university
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education
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 or
work
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experience
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. In my opinion, it all depends on the nature of the
job
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. Regarding different occupations, it is clear that certain
jobs
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 require a
university
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degree
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, sometimes a specialization or even a Master's
Degree
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.
This
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 condition is clearly in the recruitment processes, and for these
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jobs
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 no amount of
work
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experience
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 can replace higher
education
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. Examples of
such
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 occupations are doctors and engineers. A construction worker who has been working in the industry for ten years, will not become a civil engineer, no matter the
experiencing
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 that he has.
This
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 is because these professions require highly specialised knowledge that can only be acquired through many years of higher
education
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.
On the other hand
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, in some industries,
work
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experience
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 is more valuable than a
degree
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.
For example
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, in businesses
such
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 as insurance companies, some experienced sellers who only had secondary
education
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, may be promoted to senior positions as a Sales Manager, because they have a deep knowledge of how the department works. They clearly have a huge advantage over those with a
degree
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 who has just joined the company.
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, it is obvious that some
jobs
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 require extensive knowledge of the business, and in these ,cases employers will prefer those with several years of
experience
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 over fresh
university
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 graduates. In conclusion ,
apparently
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 there is no
a
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single way to obtain a great
job
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. While a
university
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degree
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 is a prerequisite for some
jobs
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,
work
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experience
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 may be more important for others. finding out what it is a desired
job
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 and knowing the requirements to be able to obtain it, can certainly help to make the best decision.
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