what are the advantages and disadvantages of watching Television for children.

Nowadays,
Television
is commonly seen in each family, as
children
can access
television
easily. In my opinion, I believe that benefit is more than drawback for
kids
watching
television
. Because watching
television
make new values, gain new
knowledge
and create
sense
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of responsibility. On the one hand, bringing
knowledge
to
kids
. Numerous
programs
of education on
television
allow
children
to learn new
knowledge
.
for example
, teenagers can gain
knowledge
about the various new products.
Secondly
, promote hygienic habits.
For example
, teaching hygienic habits by a cartoon profile which is
children
's
favorite
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that it is easy to create
children
's hygienic habits.
Moreover
, produce
children
’s responsibility.
As helping
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elder and
save
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water, which let
children
realise
that is
the
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responsible for everyone.
Thus
, watching
television
is not
bad
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a bad
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idea for
children
. On other hand,
kids
lack physical movement. Recently, a great number of
television
programs
attract
kids
and let them
focused
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on it.
For example
, many
kids
like to stay at home for watching
television
on weekend, so they might become weak.
In addition
, negative
television
impacts
children’
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behaviour. As some
programs
are drinking alcohol and smoking tobacco, or some violent behaviour that all impact teenagers to try it, For
exstance
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existence
,
conutless
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countless
violences
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violence
acts of violence
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of school
are copy
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copy
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for
television
programs
.
Therefore
,
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a parent
the parent
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parent
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parents
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can help them choose
right
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the right
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program to
watching
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watch
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, control
kids
’ time for watching
television
and encourage
children
go
to
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outside to play. To sum up, even
let
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letting
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children
watching
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watch
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television
have some issues,
but
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television
programs
still provide various positive for
children
.
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