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what are the advantages and disadvantages of watching Television for children.

#television #children
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Nowadays,
Television
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 is commonly seen in each family, as
children
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 can access
television
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 easily. In my opinion, I believe that benefit is more than drawback for
kids
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 watching
television
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. Because watching
television
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 make new values, gain new
knowledge
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 and create
sense
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 of responsibility. On the one hand, bringing
knowledge
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 to
kids
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. Numerous
programs
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 of education on
television
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 allow
children
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 to learn new
knowledge
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.
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, teenagers can gain
knowledge
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 about the various new products.
Secondly
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, promote hygienic habits.
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, teaching hygienic habits by a cartoon profile which is
children
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's
favorite
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favourite
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 that it is easy to create
children
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's hygienic habits.
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, produce
children
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’s responsibility.
As helping
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 elder and
save
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 water, which let
children
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 realise
that is
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the
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responsible for everyone.
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, watching
television
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 is not
bad
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a bad
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 idea for
children
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. On other hand,
kids
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 lack physical movement. Recently, a great number of
television
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programs
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 attract
kids
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 and let them
focused
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focus
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 on it.
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, many
kids
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 like to stay at home for watching
television
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 on weekend, so they might become weak.
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, negative
television
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 impacts
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children’
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 behaviour. As some
programs
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 are drinking alcohol and smoking tobacco, or some violent behaviour that all impact teenagers to try it, For
exstance
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existence
,
conutless
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countless
violences
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violence
acts of violence
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 of school
are copy
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copy
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 for
television
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programs
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.
Therefore
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,
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a parent
the parent
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parent
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parents
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 can help them choose
right
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the right
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 program to
watching
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watch
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, control
kids
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’ time for watching
television
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 and encourage
children
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 go
to
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outside to play. To sum up, even
let
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letting
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children
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watching
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watch
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television
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 have some issues,
but
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apply
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television
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programs
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 still provide various positive for
children
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.
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