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In the past, buildings often reflected the culture of a society but today all modern buildings look alike and cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What do you think is the reason for this, and is it good thing or a bad thing?

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Nowadays, all new constructions look alike.
On the other hand
,
people
 think that these
buildings
 should reflect our culture and tradition. In my opinion, the raising of
buildings
 must be in a similar structure to reduce the stress for Architectures.
Firstly
, our country is an overpopulated place with different
people
 living in many metropolitan cities like Hyderabad, Mumbai and Delhi. Many
people
 migrate from village to city for job, education and better lifestyle. For these
people
, the government constructed many
buildings
 in a similar pattern to reduce the
cost
 of design.
For instance
, recently Telangana government completed the
construction
 of Pink and Yellow
buildings
 for backward
people
.
This
construction
 is built in the same proportion to reduce the
cost
 of
construction
.
Moreover
,
construction
 of the same
buildings
 can reduce the
cost
 of
materials
 used to design and
this
 material can be used in the
construction
 of medical care centres.
For example
,constructing a house in a new pattern can
cost
 up to 50-60 lakhs and
materials
 like Cement, Soil, Paint and Bricks can
cost
 up to 50 thousand. These
materials
 are very limited insource.By, constructing similar
buildings
, we can reduce the use of limited
materials
 and use them for social works and hospital
construction
.
However
, the
buildings
 in the past often reflected our culture and tradition. The
buildings
 in the past are Historic Monuments now like Charminar and Taj Mahal. Nowadays, Engineers find it difficult to construct
this
 type of
buildings
 to maintain our culture. All in all, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. According to me, the raising of
buildings
 must be in a similar size and shape to reduce the stress for the masses and
also
 stress for the government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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