Many people believe that car is the best to travel n a city while others believe that bicycle is better.

Some
people
claim that
machine
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is the best to tour a city while others believe that velocipede is suitable. Both
vehicle
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have
beneficial
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a beneficial
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side
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for
travel
.
Firstly
, In
this
modernized
century
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,century
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everybody
drive
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drives
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a
car
or use public transport but to decrease using to
bicycle
.Some
people
prefer to
travel
on
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by
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car
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the car
a car
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due to it is so comfortable and useful
for instance
fast service,give an entertaining time throughout
listen
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listening
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to music,dancing inside
car
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the car
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. It is appropriate to our century to
travelling
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travel
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a
car
.
On the other
hand
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,hand
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it has disadvantages for our health,
air condition
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air-condition
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,
may be
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maybe
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become accidents the whole
travel
.
As a
result
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,result
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it causes obesity and overweight,
this
is
global
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a global
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problem among countries.
Secondly
, some
people
consider that
bicycle
is
more
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apply
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better and useful rather than
car
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a car
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because there are a lot of causes for choosing
this
vehicle to
travel
for
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,for
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example,beneficial for our health,without payment for fuel and
also
any kind of problems. It is beneficial that our
breath
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breathe
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and
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apply
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to prevent
the
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apply
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obesity.
In
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On
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sunny days it is so preferable and useful for entertainment
especially
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,especially
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among young
people
. In
conclution
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conclusion
,I prefer to
travelling
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travel
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on
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by
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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due to
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because
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it is
convinient
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convenient
and suitable.I long to
travel
on
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by
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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with my friends.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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