Many people believe that car is the best to travel n a city while others believe that bicycle is better.

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Some
people
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claim that
machine
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a machine
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is the best to tour a city while others believe that velocipede is suitable. Both
vehicle
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vehicles
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have
beneficial
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a beneficial
the beneficial
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side
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sides
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for
travel
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.
Firstly
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, In
this
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modernized
century
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everybody
drive
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drives
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a
car
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or use public transport but to decrease using to
bicycle
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.Some
people
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prefer to
travel
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on
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by
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car
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the car
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due to it is so comfortable and useful
for instance
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fast service,give an entertaining time throughout
listen
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listening
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to music,dancing inside
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car
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the car
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. It is appropriate to our century to
travelling
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travel
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a
car
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.
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hand
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it has disadvantages for our health,
air condition
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air-condition
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,
may be
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maybe
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become accidents the whole
travel
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.
As a
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result
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,result
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it causes obesity and overweight,
this
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is
global
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a global
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problem among countries.
Secondly
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, some
people
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consider that
bicycle
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is
more
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apply
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better and useful rather than
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car
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a car
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because there are a lot of causes for choosing
this
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vehicle to
travel
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for
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,for
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example,beneficial for our health,without payment for fuel and
also
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any kind of problems. It is beneficial that our
breath
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breathe
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and
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apply
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to prevent
the
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apply
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obesity.
In
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sunny days it is so preferable and useful for entertainment
especially
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among young
people
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. In
conclution
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conclusion
,I prefer to
travelling
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travel
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on
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by
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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due to
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because
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it is
convinient
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convenient
and suitable.I long to
travel
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on
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by
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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with my friends.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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