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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued that governments should involve in
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design
 in huge
cities
, while others argued that governments do not have to
retrict
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restrict
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 the free of designers' imagination if those designs are splendid fit on the
cities
. I believe that if that were to happen, it would be
the
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 positive development.
This
 essay will highlight
the
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both views and give
personal
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opinion
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opinions
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 from the former argument's side.
To begin
 with
latter
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 opinion,
although
 governments have worried about the combination of buildings entirely, the strong limitation about
design
 can cause squandering of designers' skills. There
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huge
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number
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 of competitions about designing
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a building
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building
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buildings
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 in
this
 society, and the evolution in these fields has developed dramatically.
However
, if there is
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strict
criteria
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on
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design
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the design
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 of
building
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the building
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, the majority of
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 do not need to hammer away to come up with
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revolutionary
revolutional
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 outline for building.
On the other hand
,
signitured
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signature
design
 of the big
cities
 by itself can be the purpose of
trevelling
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travelling
 as a landmark, and it can be followed by significant economical achievement in the country. To take
myself
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 as an example, in 2017, I went to Gold Coast
for
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 study automotive engineering, and I was
stunnied
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stunned
becaused
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because
 of the atmosphere which is formed by
combination
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 of similar buildings and
beach
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.
Furthermore
, according to the research from Sydney
university
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, Gold Coast is one of the
cities
 which make a fortune because of
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marvelous
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 view. To sum
up
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with
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, I would
therefore
 argue that in spite of the fact that building
design
 restriction can influence
on
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architects negatively, it has a potential ability to make a significant profit in the future.

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