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Some people believe that modern inventions bring problems than benefits. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #inventions
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of five kinds of transportation which was used by society over a twenty-five-
year
 period between 1990 and 2015. Overall, it can be seen that the
number
 of
car
 and
train
users
 showed the same
trend
 as well as the
usage
 of bus and
train
 transportation.
However
, the former demonstrated an increasing style, and the letter experienced an inclining
trend
. Regarding
to
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the rising
usage
, both figures depicted
the
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a
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 different
change
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changes
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. In comparison with
train
,
car
users
 stood at just over 50 which means that it was higher than the
usage
 of
train
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the train
a train
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 in the
first
 period. Following
this
, the
number
 of
train
users
 witnessed a growth by above a half since the
car
usage
 decreased slightly to 50. That means that the change of
train
 was more significant than that of automobile transportation.
Subsequently
, the
train
users
 jumped to over 90
exceeded
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 the
number
 of
car
users
 in the
last
year
. Starting to the falling
trend
, even though the
usage
 of bus declined over the period, it was higher than bicycle
users
 until the
last
year
.
At
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 the
first
year
, the
number
 of people employed
the
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 bus was just above 70 followed by
the
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a
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 fluctuated
trend
 until the
last
year
 which stood at 55. Bicycle
users
 showed the fluctuated
trend
 as well, starting at around 31 before slightly
increased
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 to under 40.
This
 figure
felt
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fell
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 to
tiny
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a tiny
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 proportion, at 15
users
.
However
, the steady style highlighted in the way of walking, the fluctuated
trend
 experienced at under 10.

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