Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

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It is argued that vaccines could prevent many illnesses.

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, there are families that refuse to inject their youngsters with vaccines, while others believe that it should be required.

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essay examines both sides of

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argument and why I believe that it is kosher to be

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vaccinated

. On the one hand, there is a proponent that disagrees that

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officials should not force citizens to be injected with any substance. There are several reasons why there are families that do not want their children to get the

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, they believe that humans have natural immunity that prevents us from numerous viruses.

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, individuals had been

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their everyday life

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, there are parents that have the notion that governments must not mandate citizens to get the

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, they believe that they have the free will to choose

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their children.

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, there is a consensus among

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that advocate

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the benefits of the use of

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the vaccine

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. These individuals have various reasons why they support the idea of vaccination.

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with, there are a plethora of

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, articles, and books that reinforced the fact that vaccines are protecting

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body from

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diseases.

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, policymakers should come up with a policy that mandate

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citizens

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and should be

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, human beings should have

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and put themselves in

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shoes. When someone is not

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there could be a chance that a virus to be

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spread

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among

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, cities, and countries.

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, the COVID-19 virus had been

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within a few months, and to stop that chain

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should have

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distance

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. In conclusion, I believe both sides have merits. On balance,

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, it is my opinion that families must allow their minors to get the

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is because it cures many illnesses that in the past have killed

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

The working week should be shorted and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a house with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

In many countries the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress. what do you think are the causes of this? can you suggest some possible solutions?