Modern lifestyles means that many parents have little time for their children.Many children suffer because they do not have her as much from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or did agree?

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In the current busy world majority of the
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moment to spend with their offspring. A lot of children nowadays suffer as they get little attention as compared to the past. I agree with the said statement as a lot of youngsters start taking drugs as they have no one to guide them.
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loneliness leads to more tv watching which impact their moods a lot.
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fast-moving ,world everyone is working hard to earn more money for a better future. In
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thirst to acquire more and more people tend to spend the majority of their occasion sitting at the office desk and attending meetings which affect their young offspring. In the large metro ,
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kids
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spend most of their time with caretakers are servents. As a ,result many of the young offspring become drug addicts.
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, as per a survey done by an international magazine more than 70 per cent of the
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with working
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have low attendance in comparison to students whose mothers are housewives.
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,
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who have both working
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spend nearly 7-8 hours watching Television which has a negative impact on their eyes, thoughts and mind. They tend to be very violent and arrogant as they don't have anyone to guide and supervise. These children become criminals when they grow older and not only that they have very little respect for their
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as well.
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most children want to stay alone and spend time with their friends
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of spending time with their family.
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noticed that there are more fights over the property in big
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in comparison to the villages and small
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, we can conclude that, if both the
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of any child is working
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there is a greater possibility that they are prone to drugs and have a bad moral character in comparison to
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who don't have both working
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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